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The minute I saw her,
I knew I had to meet,
I just had to meet this stranger.
That was sitting in my seat;

She was different,
New and dark,
She as brave and she was cool,
A flower amongst weeds,
My urge to know her grew;

Though her colors were not vibrant,
Her language rude and coarse,
I ventured towards her quickly,
Feeling drawn to this new force;

Using him as an excuse,
I enveloped her in a hug,
"Wanna be friends?" I asked
Her body warm and snug;

Over time we grew close,
'Till we knew each other's thoughts,
I liked her more but so did he,
So I forced on a joyous smile,
And here you'll see me wait-and see;

But then he tossed her heart away,
After hearing of the past,
Of what she really did back then,
Of the cuts -sharp and fast;

When she cried I was there,
To listen to her tale,
From long before we had ever met,
And soon her sorrow'd pale;

With a chance of circumstance,
And a push from nosy friends,
I now hold tight her hugs and life,
We're friends and more- that's the end.
©2006-2010 #dapride
:icondapride:

Author's Comments

Submission by: Megan

"A poem about the new girl at school from last year. She was dating a guy friend but he broke up with her after he found out she used to be suicidal. Then a friend showed her this poem and we've been dating since. (I've updated the last few lines for anyone who's read the original) Thanks Linds for showing her! <3"

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:icondoreneincredible:
Sweet. I love happy endings to true stories.

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Will You Be My Friend?
:iconcaptainoscillator:
gotta love a happy ending.

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I eat you dog! Dog with ramen! mmm....ramendog.
Yep, Vampires...cool.
:iconheroamongstthieves:
God what a prick! That's really good though. I like it a lot.

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I want apathy to everything. So then, I would feel nothing. And then I could move on. - AD
:iconangelofplottwists:
I like your rhythm, except the last two lines seem slightly off. Maybe because they were written later?

But I love the story. Happy stories are good.

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This is your punishment.
:iconfoundnlost:
Aww that was beautiful, i hope more people like you can find happy endings...:)

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:bounce: Visit my Gallery =P [link]
:iconmahrooganie:
I love it.

It's really good

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... :pride: ...
-xoxo-
Stephuu
:iconfloofeh-kitteh:
Wow, so meaningful. Glad that it was a happy ending<3

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I am Pokemon #468 Togekiss in DA's Pokemon Crew

Omg. I'm going to see MCR in January! -squeal- :heart:

HelloGoodbye<333
:iconcontradicted-enigma:
This is good, but some words of advice; keep in mind that not everything needs to rhyme (pun/rhyme not intended).

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:blackrose: :camera: Brie M. :camera: :blackrose:

"In a world filled with broken bones and broken homes, / Our souls riddled with bruises"
:iconskeeze:
This is sweet. She really deserves you.

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My new account: ~amclear

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