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Across The Hall - Slowlydying

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We were awake in the early morning.
The silence in the room across the hall was torture.
At any noise I would roll my half naked body across the bed
and hug the wall as best I could,
pull the covers up over myself
and pray that the darkness would somehow shelter us.

I feared our whispers were too loud
our kisses- too obvious.
But the man across the hall and in that room
was fast asleep
or too tired to keep his eyes open for longer than three minutes
before re-entering dream mode.

If he knew his daughter was wrapped up in the arms of another girl
would that be the end?
I'm so sick of hiding.  So sick!
But anything must be better than him knowing.

I'm not playing dyke like I played my little kid games.
This is me.
It's how I feel, what I want.
I didn't choose to feel this way.
It just happened.
And so the one I love is a female.
And she loves me too.
Is that so wrong?
Title: Room Acoss The Hall

I wish I could feel the way I feel without consequences. But I guess that'd be fair. And life's not fair.

I realize this poem sucks, so I'd love your critiques!

:iconslowlydying:
~Slowlydying

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flyingwombat's avatar
you express your thoughts very well, which is the most important part of any writing. I'm glad you didn't try to rhyme anything, that would have stifled the flow of emotion. If anything at all I might suggest the syllable rule if you want more structure - meaning, make all the lines have the same or roughly the same syllable count, so you can get a rhythm or cadence going when you read it. but of course that depends entirely on what kind of feeling you're going for.